A/HRC/33/59 Article 2 Art. 2.1. question on the term “extraterritorially” used here; what is meant exactly? Which rights have extraterrorial effect? Art 2.2. given the broadness of the declaration but also the vagueness of a lot of the language, this could potentially be very far reaching. Art 2.6. question on the “regulation of private individuals”. Art 2.7.a. needs a caveat “where applicable”. Development cooperation can also be geared to rural populations, for instance. Art 2.7.e. not completely sure what is meant here; clarification would be needed. Article 3 Art 3.2. small rephrase to read “full enjoyment of all human rights”. With this edit, this paragraph is actually broader than focusing only on dignity, equality and nondiscrimination and comes close to the chapeau paragraph which we have suggested earlier, which could really help in streamlining and shortening the text. Art 3.3. request to stop after “exercise of their rights”. Art 3.4. affirmative action as such is controversial, and the language in this paragraph is quite vague – what is expected from states exactly? Article 4 Art 4. in general support for text as it stands; Art 4.3. could potentially be rephrased in a more positive manner. Article 5 Art 5.1. some unclarity with this paragraph, and this is one which could be used as an example of our general comment on sources/referencing, to assess the text on the basis of its sources. It seems to not take into account the fact that some resources may very well be state assets, and we also believe that it somehow suggests that whoever grows certain foods should have control over the end user. Art 5.3. request: “human rights, including the right to development”. Although “developing” strategies also seems to imply the right to decide on human rights programming which is maybe not what drafters envisaged. Art 5.4. clarification needed for healthy and culturally sources/references. Also reword into “it entails the right to”. appropriate food – Art 5.6. chapeau. “any” exploitation; the word “any” makes the whole para a bit unrealistic, suggest to leave it out. 5.6.a. is that truly a realistic notion, for “any” exploitation. 5.6.b. see recurring comment on “peasants” being presented as a homogenous block. United States Article 3 3. Peasants and other people working in rural areas have the right to be free from any kind of discrimination and any incitement to discrimination in the exercise of their rights, individually or collectively, in particular to be free from discrimination based on grounds 27